A quick note to all students who are reading preceptfunland regularly.
An error in many of the papers that I've received is an inability to understand the difference between "Idealistic" and "Ideal".
An ideal is something that is perfect, for its purpose. For instance, you can have an "ideal criminal", or an "ideal jerk".
Tom can be an "ideal 1920s playboy (person who has a lot of fun, and many women)", but he can not be idealistic.
Idealistic, means that someone believes in an ideal world, or an ideal future. Almost no one in the book, especially Nick, is idealistic. However, there are many people (who at least superficially) are ideals.
1. Daisy is ideally beautiful, and funny (but really a bad person)
2. Tom is the ideal rich, powerful, brutal man (but really weak and unable to confront reality)
3. Gatsby is the ideal partying, bootlegger, criminal (but really he is a good person)
4. Meyer Wolfsheim is the ideal strongman criminal (but does not stand up for his friends)
The ideal is a tool used by artists to make points; Idealism is something young people who want to save the world have.
Sunday, March 29, 2009
Saturday, March 28, 2009
HWP Format
Please, don't use it.
.hwp format is unreadable to computers not bought in Korea. I don't have a computer bought in Korea. Please, send in .doc or .txt format.
Thanks to everyone who has sent in their work!
Sang-Ki, I await your paper with bated breath.
Best,
-John Teacher
.hwp format is unreadable to computers not bought in Korea. I don't have a computer bought in Korea. Please, send in .doc or .txt format.
Thanks to everyone who has sent in their work!
Sang-Ki, I await your paper with bated breath.
Best,
-John Teacher
Debate Winner
Team Sumo:
Strengths:
1. Good points about the necessity of conservation
2. Strong opening statement
2. A multitude of these points were made.
Weaknesses:
1. A specific case was not built up:
The opening constructive argument requires that a specific CASE is built up to demonstrate the validity, solvency, and inherent validity of your argument.
2. Rebuttal did not question, or specifically attack the opposite side's position (is National Geographic Literature or conservation study?)
Middle ground:
1. Questions asked were good for obtaining information, but did not allow you to attack the other team directly.
2. No real questions were ASKED to the team, so no points will be deducted
Opening statement 25/30
Supporting points (cases) 30/40
Questions Asked: 10/15
Questions Responded: 15/15
Bonus points for having TWO team members turn in paper on time +5
Total: 85/100
Team Boys:
Strengths and weaknesses: Young Geun did a good amount of research for your team. However, your team did NOT address the topic "literature study AGAINST conservation study".
There is a big difference between "studying conservation", as your topic did, and arguing that conservation is better than something else.
If the topic had been "the necessity for conservation, you'd have won the debate easily.
Alas, it was not.
Also, when questioned as to your topic relating to the subject, Team Boy was unable to effectively defend this point. It did not relate, so this would have been a very hard point to win.
Opening statement: 20/30 (no real thesis, but strong research)
Supporting points: 35/40 (again, a lot of information, but not addressing the topic
Asking Questions: 12/15
Responding to questions: 5/15
Total:
72/100 (If Sang-Ki and Jae-Young had done research, or presented a thesis you COULD have won.)
Team Eun-Soo-Su-Bin:
Strengths: The opening statement was nearly perfect as you addressed the other side's arguments before going into your argument.
Additionally, you pointed out the internal qualities of literary study (emotional), before launching into examples (Farenheit 451) warning against ignorance.
Asking questions: You were able to pin down the very quick witted Young Geun about his lack of a thesis
Responding to questions: Questioned about the validity of including The Great Gatsby in your argument, you were able to specifically state that it was related only to your argument concerning emotional states.
Weaknesses: Your rebuttal did not elaborate, or provide any strong information that built upon your position. Luckily, you had already constructed a quite strong argument, and defended against all questions.
Also, you classified "National Geographic" as literature, not conservation. If you remember the debate topic concerned "conservation STUDY", not the actual act of conservation. Victoria was GOING to question you about this, but did not. So you escaped without having to rebut this point. You were very lucky on that topic.
Opening statement: 29/30 ( I hate to give perfect scores)
Supporting points: 37/40 (If you'd specifically cited an instance in Fahrenheit 451, or The Great Gatsby, you could've been 40/40, maybe...)
Asking Questions: 13/15 (You failed to question Team Sumo)
Responding to Questions: 15/15 (Nearly perfect responses).
Total score 93/100
Winner: Team Eun-Soo-Su-Bin
Strengths:
1. Good points about the necessity of conservation
2. Strong opening statement
2. A multitude of these points were made.
Weaknesses:
1. A specific case was not built up:
The opening constructive argument requires that a specific CASE is built up to demonstrate the validity, solvency, and inherent validity of your argument.
2. Rebuttal did not question, or specifically attack the opposite side's position (is National Geographic Literature or conservation study?)
Middle ground:
1. Questions asked were good for obtaining information, but did not allow you to attack the other team directly.
2. No real questions were ASKED to the team, so no points will be deducted
Opening statement 25/30
Supporting points (cases) 30/40
Questions Asked: 10/15
Questions Responded: 15/15
Bonus points for having TWO team members turn in paper on time +5
Total: 85/100
Team Boys:
Strengths and weaknesses: Young Geun did a good amount of research for your team. However, your team did NOT address the topic "literature study AGAINST conservation study".
There is a big difference between "studying conservation", as your topic did, and arguing that conservation is better than something else.
If the topic had been "the necessity for conservation, you'd have won the debate easily.
Alas, it was not.
Also, when questioned as to your topic relating to the subject, Team Boy was unable to effectively defend this point. It did not relate, so this would have been a very hard point to win.
Opening statement: 20/30 (no real thesis, but strong research)
Supporting points: 35/40 (again, a lot of information, but not addressing the topic
Asking Questions: 12/15
Responding to questions: 5/15
Total:
72/100 (If Sang-Ki and Jae-Young had done research, or presented a thesis you COULD have won.)
Team Eun-Soo-Su-Bin:
Strengths: The opening statement was nearly perfect as you addressed the other side's arguments before going into your argument.
Additionally, you pointed out the internal qualities of literary study (emotional), before launching into examples (Farenheit 451) warning against ignorance.
Asking questions: You were able to pin down the very quick witted Young Geun about his lack of a thesis
Responding to questions: Questioned about the validity of including The Great Gatsby in your argument, you were able to specifically state that it was related only to your argument concerning emotional states.
Weaknesses: Your rebuttal did not elaborate, or provide any strong information that built upon your position. Luckily, you had already constructed a quite strong argument, and defended against all questions.
Also, you classified "National Geographic" as literature, not conservation. If you remember the debate topic concerned "conservation STUDY", not the actual act of conservation. Victoria was GOING to question you about this, but did not. So you escaped without having to rebut this point. You were very lucky on that topic.
Opening statement: 29/30 ( I hate to give perfect scores)
Supporting points: 37/40 (If you'd specifically cited an instance in Fahrenheit 451, or The Great Gatsby, you could've been 40/40, maybe...)
Asking Questions: 13/15 (You failed to question Team Sumo)
Responding to Questions: 15/15 (Nearly perfect responses).
Total score 93/100
Winner: Team Eun-Soo-Su-Bin
Thursday, March 26, 2009
Guidelines for Final Paper
Note: Your paper must be between 800 and 1000 typed words. Font size should be between 10 and 12 point font. All papers must include every element on this list to be given credit.
I. Introduction:
1. Opening quote
2. Hook
3. General Statement Introducing the Topic
4. Consideration of the Opposite
5. Strong Thesis Statement
II. Body:
1. Paragraph 1: Summary of the book, or article you are basing your paper on
A: State the type of book
B: Define the thesis of your book or article
C: What is the main figure (if a literary work), or the main figure involved in your article
D: What is the outcome of the book or article
2. Paragraphs 2 and 3: Support your thesis with two positive, or one positive and one negative example
A: Topic of each of these paragraphs should directly relate to the thesis
B: Watch to make sure your concluding sentences link to each other
C: Cite examples in text for your evidence (don't forget a works cited list)
3. Paragraph 4: Statement of the Opposite (Not necessary in National Geographic)
A. Use the same format as paragraphs 2 and 3
B. Make sure your paragraph is a direct acknowledgment of the opposite viewpoint
III. Conclusion:
A. Restate your thesis
B. Make a final statement regarding the opposite position
C. Expand your thesis making a continuing statement, or warning.
IV. Works Cited:
1. List the sources used.
A. For a report concerning a book, and using a traditional analytical method, you only need to cite the book in this section
B.When integrating multiple subjects for the National Geographic topic, cite all sources and National Geographic itself.
I. Introduction:
1. Opening quote
2. Hook
3. General Statement Introducing the Topic
4. Consideration of the Opposite
5. Strong Thesis Statement
II. Body:
1. Paragraph 1: Summary of the book, or article you are basing your paper on
A: State the type of book
B: Define the thesis of your book or article
C: What is the main figure (if a literary work), or the main figure involved in your article
D: What is the outcome of the book or article
2. Paragraphs 2 and 3: Support your thesis with two positive, or one positive and one negative example
A: Topic of each of these paragraphs should directly relate to the thesis
B: Watch to make sure your concluding sentences link to each other
C: Cite examples in text for your evidence (don't forget a works cited list)
3. Paragraph 4: Statement of the Opposite (Not necessary in National Geographic)
A. Use the same format as paragraphs 2 and 3
B. Make sure your paragraph is a direct acknowledgment of the opposite viewpoint
III. Conclusion:
A. Restate your thesis
B. Make a final statement regarding the opposite position
C. Expand your thesis making a continuing statement, or warning.
IV. Works Cited:
1. List the sources used.
A. For a report concerning a book, and using a traditional analytical method, you only need to cite the book in this section
B.When integrating multiple subjects for the National Geographic topic, cite all sources and National Geographic itself.
Sang-Ki and Young-Geun
Final Assignment: A three paragraph description and comparison of two characters
Topic: Assess and analyze the differences between Tom and Gatsby
Paragraph 1: Describe Tom's physical characteristics and behavior
Paragraph 2: Describe Jay Gatsby's physical characteristics and behavior
Paragraph 3: Analyze the differences between the two characters
Topic: Assess and analyze the differences between Tom and Gatsby
Paragraph 1: Describe Tom's physical characteristics and behavior
Paragraph 2: Describe Jay Gatsby's physical characteristics and behavior
Paragraph 3: Analyze the differences between the two characters
Paper Grading Policy
Paper grading policy:
Saturday Morning: +17.5%
Saturday 10 PM: +10%
Sunday: 0%
Monday or later: -5% per day
Inclusion of all required sections: 40%
Proper use of vocabulary: 15%
A logical and well supported thesis: 35%
Debate Grading:
Opening Statement: 30%
Supporting Points: 40%
Response to Questions: 15%
Asking Questions: 15%
Saturday Morning: +17.5%
Saturday 10 PM: +10%
Sunday: 0%
Monday or later: -5% per day
Inclusion of all required sections: 40%
Proper use of vocabulary: 15%
A logical and well supported thesis: 35%
Debate Grading:
Opening Statement: 30%
Supporting Points: 40%
Response to Questions: 15%
Asking Questions: 15%
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The goals of this blog:
1. To provide students a chance to REVIEW assignments they may have missed, or not understood
2. A forum for questions, on the students' and teachers' part.
3. Quick submission, and review, of assignments.
4. An awesome way to learn, without having to drag your papers to class, and back again, every day!
Enjoy!
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